【精翻美文】怎样用你的课外活动来使招生官对你留下好印象？

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How to Impress Adcoms with your Extracurricular？

怎样用你的课外活动来使招生官对你留下好印象？

 

Want to know how to impress adcoms with your extracurriculars? Follow Eternity_Hope2005's excellent advice that was originally placed elsewhere on our boards, but deserves to be featured on one of our most popular boards.

想知道怎样用你的课外活动来使招生官对你留下好印象吗？那就来看看Eternity_Hope2005的建议吧。即使它们一开始只是被置于论坛的角落，也不妨碍它们最终成为我们版块最红的帖子。

 

"Let me tell you something. Everyone wants to look brilliant and versatile. I mean who doesn't want to tell the admissions officer that they are everywhere in the community and have taken a phenomenal amount of interest in extracurriculars.

“让我来告诉你吧。每个人都想变得精英出众，多才多艺。我的意思是谁不想告诉招生官他们穿梭于社区的每一个角落，对课外活动表现出相当的兴趣。

 

The plan to talk about specific ec's rather than all of them is still much more efficient. Here's why. An admissions officer simply has to look at your ec files in order to determine whether or not you have been involved in the community. You don't need to write an essay and specifically tell him about your numerous community activities in order for him to butter him up about your "versatile" skills.

讨论具体的EC细节无疑比笼统地来讨论更加有效。想知道为什么吗？招生官只需要看你的EC文件表就可以看出你是否融入了社会。你并不必要为了让招生官对你留下所谓“多才多艺”的印象，去写一篇文章来叙述你众多的社会活动。

 

Almost everyone who applies to these top schools has pages and pages of extracurricular activities. You’re not the only one who has been extremely "versatile" as a high school student. Thousands of students clearly want their ec's to stand out; they are all going to be indicated them in an essay and have their counselor’s recommendation include those numerous activities they have done outside of school.

几乎所有申请顶尖学校的人都拥有长达数页课外活动介绍。你并不是唯一一个特别多才多艺的高中生。有数以千计的学生希望他们的EC出众;他们在essay中写下这些表现，并让他们顾问的推荐信涵盖他们众多的课外活动。

 

This conveys a message to the admissions officer that you are certainly involved in the community. So the admissions officer will say "this kid right here is not someone who limits himself to school and academics. He certainly takes part in the community and that is a good thing."

这些都向招生官传递了你已经融入社会的信息。所以招生官会说“这孩子并不是那些所谓的书呆子，他参与到了社会当中，而他所做的一些都对他有益。

 

However, if you really want your admissions officer to ADMIRE you (in other words want your folder to truly stand out); you've got to show your personality as not just involved, but truly passionate and real. What this means is that you won't seem like just a application folder anymore; instead you seem much more animated and creative - in short, much more human and real. This is what separates you from that other kid who also had the same, long list of ec's.

然而，如果你真的想让招生官器重你（或者想要变得与众不同）；你不应该仅仅把你的注意力放在参与上，还要投入热情和真实感。也就是说你看起来不像一个申请的机器，反而看起来更加的生动鲜活，富有创造力，简而言之，更加真实化，人性化。这就是你与那些递交了一堆EC活动清单的孩子所不同的地方。

 

How does one do this? How does one show their personality like this? The only real choice that you have is through your essay. Some might say interview. Well, most schools actually place much more importance on your essay than your interview. The reason is simple: Your essay is your only communication medium inside that committee room. Only one person interviews you but everyone reads your essay. It is the only way that you speak and show your feelings and creativeness. Your essay can be an amazing asset. 

那么怎么去实践呢？怎样去突出个性？唯一的方式就是通过你的文书。有些人可能会说面试。然而，

大部分的学校对文书的重视程度要大于面试。原因很简单，你的文书是你在招生办公室唯一的交流媒介。只能有一个人来面试你而每个人都能读到你的文书。所以这是你唯一的方式来交流并且显示你的内心感觉和创造力。你的文书可以成为你难以置信的财富。

 

By picking specific ec activities and talking about them; your writing prose and content go much deeper and beyond the superficial areas.

通过选择具体的EC活动并加以讨论，你写出的散文和内容会拥有深刻的，超越平庸肤浅的洞察力

 

As a result, you won't seem like a kid trying to impress an admissions committee about how versatile you are. Instead, you will convey something deeper and more meaningful to them: your livelihood and passions. When you focus and narrow down on a topic and speak about yourself very experiences very deeply; it shows your feelings, thoughts, and ideas so much more. It makes you seem so much more human and real; not just as an application folder sitting in front of their eyes out of the thousands! It makes you more unique and real in front of their eyes. 

这样的话，你就不会感觉自己在拼命地让招生官对自己留下多才多艺的印象。反而，你会传递给他们一些更深刻更有意义的东西：生活和热情。当你专注于一个话题并很深刻地阐述你的经历时，这些能够充分显示你的感受，理念和思想。这些能让你看起来更加真实，不像那些数以千计的坐在招生官面前的申请机器一样。

 

I have had many friends with tons of ec activities and 4.0 GPA along with a very rigorous curriculum and a good SAT score get rejected from places like Dartmouth, UPenn. After all these years (I'm now at one of the top engineering schools in the country), my friends and I realize why we got rejected from certain places we tried to get into back then. We just never conveyed ourself enough to the admissions committee.

在我身边有这样一群朋友，他们有无数的EC活动，在极其严格的课程中取得的4.0gpa和非常出色的SAT成绩，但是被达特茅斯，宾夕法尼亚这样的大学拒录。这些年以后（我正在国内一所顶尖的工程学校就读），我和我的朋友意识到了为什么我们当时申请时被拒绝的原因：我们从未把我们自己充分地展现给招生官。

 

Here's the deal. Think of it as two different cases.

具体是这样的.下面我们来看看两个不同的事例.

 

Case # 1) This kid named Jill has her list of ec activities and talks about how she is very versatile and yada yada.... She also relists most of his ec activities in an essay of its own.

Jill有非常多的EC活动,并谈论她是如何的多才多艺,等等.她也重新在她的文书中列举许多活动.

 

Case #2) This kid named Jenny has the same list of ec activities. Instead of listing all the activities over again in another essay, she picks one activity that she felt the most passionate about. Jenny than goes very in depth and talks about her feelings and experiences about that one activity. She even talks about how it has helped her be a slightly different person in life. How it has helped her to look at things in a different and that one activity that really impacted her.

Jenny有着相同数量的EC活动.相反,她并不是在她的文书中反复地列举她的活动，她挑选了其中一项她十分热爱的活动。Jenny接下来深刻地描述了她在这个活动中所产生的感受和经历。她甚至描写了这个活动怎样在生活中让她变得不同，怎样用不同的眼光看待事物，总之，这个活动对她产生了很深的影响。

 

To me, Jenny shows much more of his personality than Jill. I really didn't need Jill to re-list all her ec's and I feel that Jill is trying to FORCE IT. She's trying too hard to get the admission's admiration and that is just pathetic. Goodbye Jill.

对于我来说，Jenny相比较Jill而言，展现出了更多的个性。我并不需要Jill去重新地列举她的EC，而且我感到Jill是在强迫自己。她过分强求得到招生官的注意，这是非常乏味的。所以，再见Jill！

 

Jenny on the other hand has done a superior job of conveying her personality and experiences. She did not seem like she was forcing it across. It is clear that Jenny is not trying hard to capture anybody's attention; she is simply speaking about who she is and how she feels about life. This person has much more of an impact on me than Jill.

Jenny相反，在表达她的个性和经历方面要做得更好。她看起来并没有在强求这些。很清楚，Jenny并没有很努力地去抓住任何人的注意力；她仅仅叙述了她是怎样一个人和她对生活的感悟。所以她相比较Jill，给我留下了更深刻的印象。

 

Jill is just one of the thousands of applicants who seem like they really, really want in this college. That's all I can say about her other. She may have good grades and good test scores but thousands who apply to these top schools have those same credentials; Jill just is not standing out in her application to me.

Jill只是数以千计的非常渴望进入这个大学的申请者之一。这是我对她的所有评价。她可能会有不错的分数但是那些数千的申请者拥有相同的实力；Jill在我看来并不足以鹤立鸡群。

 

Jenny is someone who I can visualize as a real person outside of her material application file that I'm holding. That coupled with good grades and SAT scores and recommendations presents a MUCH stronger file than Jill's. She isn't perfect but she is someone who the admissions would take very seriously. Chances are in her favor that they will take her. 

Get the point?"

而Jenny是那种我可以在手握她的申请材料之外，直观感受到的鲜活的人。她讲成绩，sat分数，推荐信相结合，展现出比Jill更强的竞争力。她并不是完美的，但是她确实招生官能够倾心对待的学生。机会对她有利，并帮助她成功。

知道了吗？

 

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